Jene Licausi: I began school life in London. Soon after I moved to a school in Karachi, but by 2001 me and my family had moved to Bahrain; which is where I continued the rest of my studies.
Oscar Wieland: Hey Optimist, you have three sentences there. The message you are wanting to convey is evident. Which sentence are you trying to improve and why?
Sook Hershkowitz: I began my early career a student in London, England. I studied primary level education in 2001, in Karachi, (England?). Then, my beloved family moved to the wonderful town of Bahrain, (England?), and as a result of that, I continued my studies in Bahrain, (England?)
Ester Bryand: London is where I started my early education and in Karachi for my primary level education. In 2001, my familly and I moved to Bahrain and continued the rest of my studies there.
Devon Kalberer: I commenced my early education in London and then did my primary level education in Karachi, However my family mo! ved to Bahrain in 2001 and thus had to finish off the rest of my studies there.
Jene Licausi: I started my early education in London, and my primary level education was done in Karachi. In 2001, my family moved to Behrain, where I continued the restof my education.
Kip Ockenfels: which sentence, there are two. You could drop the double "had" in the second.
Esmeralda Pigram: I started my early education in London. I studied my primary level education in Karachi and in 2001 my family and I had been shifted to Bahrain and continued the rest of the studies there.
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